Error Analysis - Academic Writing

Identify and correct the errors below. They could relate to grammar, vocabulary or style

01. Majority of ...
02. ... in recent, Indian government opened its watch market ...
03. ... in India market.
04. Titan marketing activities both in domestic and global market.
05. ... and so on.
06. In 2003 Titan report, it showed that ...
07. ... are on increasing.
08. ... by using following models, they are ...
09. ... according to X stated that ...
10. ... to look into ...
11. ... according to X, he indicated that ...
12. Following areas will be discussed ...
13. According to that case study, it is shown that Titan ...
14. ... in world watch market.
15. ... could be analysed as followed ...
16. ... can be analysed by ... as the figure shown below ...
17. There is another research scholar, X ... wrote in ...
18. ... strategy is growing important to lead success to an organisation.
19. From a number of survey results, it showed that ...
20. It may questioned the slimmest watch ...
21. ... Titan should able to ...
22. In analysis this model, we could identify several weakness in ...
23. In all above analysis ...
24. ... all strategic choices are very critical to ...
25. ... is another big challenge ...

















01. The Majority of ...

02. ... in recent years, the Indian government has opened its watch market ...
OR "Recently, the Indian government ..."

03. ... in the Indian market.

04. Titan marketing activities are in both the both in domestic and the global market.

05. ... and so on.
Not academic writing.

06. In the 2003 Titan report, it can be seen showed that ...
OR "According to the Titan report in 2003 ..."
OR "In 2003 Titan reported that ..."
OR "In 2003 Titan report showed ..."
OR "The 2003 Titan report showed/shows"

07. ... are on increasing.
OR "... are on the increase"

08. ... by using the following models, which are ___, ___ and ___. they are ...
OR "... by using the following models, namely ___, ___, and ___."

09. ... according to X stated that ...
don't use verb. after "according to"

10. ... to look into ...
Not academic writing.
Use "analyse" "evaluate" "examine" "investigate"

11. ... according to X, he indicated that ...
same as 09.

12. The Following areas will be discussed ...

13. According to that case study, it can be seen is shown that Titan ...
OR "The case study shows that Titan ..."

14. ... in the world watch market.

15. ... could be analysed as follows followed ...

16. ... can be analysed by ... as the figure shows shown below ...

17. There is another research scholar, X ... wrote in ...
scholar is a person, so we can't use "there is" here.

18. ... strategy is increasingly growing important to bring lead success to an organisation.
OR "... strategy is of growing importance to ..."

19. From a number of survey results, it can be seen showed that ...

20. It may be questioned whether the slimmest watch ...
question + whether

21. ... Titan should be able to ...

22. In the analysis of this model, several weakness could be identified we could identify several weakness in ...
OR "In analysing this model, ..."

23. In all above analysis ...

24. ... all the strategic choices are very critical to ...
"critical" is for extreme condition already, don't need to use "very".

25. ... is another big challenge ...
Not academic writing.
Use "major" "significant"